Writing a story together

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Permalink Reply by temptress of darkness on June 30, 2009 at 8:25pm

this is a reply to the 1st comment at the top of the page ^

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Permalink Reply by Okoru Miyato on March 10, 2009 at 12:10am

POV change (Lila):

I had walked outside for lunch, wanting to relax a bit away from the crowd, when i saw a notebook lying on the ground. I picked it up, and smiled a bit as i realized who's it was. The energy matched that of the new girl, Reynolds, the teacher had said. I stuffed it in my bag, thinking id give it to her whenever i saw her again. I had a sudden urge to go fix my hair, something i never usually cared about. As i walked into the bathroom, I saw her there.
"Hey!" i said quickly, smiling. Coincidence? I think not.

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Permalink Reply by Blood Angel on March 10, 2009 at 4:03am

POV Change (to Keisha)

I turned as the girl from my math class, Thorne, spoke. She was smiling. I wasn't used to people smiling at me outside my family, but there was something about the smile that made me relax.
"Um, hey," I answered, hoping the panic that was starting to rise wasn't showing. I really didn't want what was written in there to get around the school. I wondered how well he knew people around here. "Is Mr. Krebble always like that?" I asked, really wanting to get my mind off the missing journal.


*I gave the math teacher a name. Are the teachers supernatural, too?*

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Permalink Reply by Okoru Miyato on March 10, 2009 at 4:10am

POV change (to Lila):

"Oh, yeah. He's a prick. Don't worry 'bout it... he kinda hates me. Oh!" i said, suddenly remembering the notebook. I started scrounging through my purple messenger bag, covered in pins with random sayings on them. After a moment of digging through the mess, I pulled out the notebook.
"This is yours, right? By the way I'm Lila, Lila Thorne." I smiled again, handing her the notebook.

-um... i hav no clue. i hope not, but i think thats up to Aisling-

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Permalink Reply by Blood Angel on March 10, 2009 at 5:16am

POV Change (Keisha)

I really hoped the relief didn't show on my face.
"Yes, I just realized I'd lost it. Thank you," I told myself to cool it just then. "I'm Keisha Reynolds," Then I thought of something. "Do people jump from windows often around here?" After saying it, I realized that kinda sounded real stupid.

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Permalink Reply by Aisling on March 10, 2009 at 5:26pm

The girl laughed at me. Then the Smith kid suddenly came through the door, it looked as if he'd either been running or been pushed through. Both mine and Lila's jaws dropped.

POV Change (Dave):

I was panting slightly, I thought it was better to keep panting rather than to stop breathing unless I needed to talk.

"I need to talk to you." I said through my pants to the Reynolds girl.

"Ex... excuse me?" She was still shocked that I had come into the girl's loos. I didn't care though. This was important.

"Perhaps if we go somewhere... more private?" I said, looking pointedly at Lila. Horror came over Reynolds' face. "Not... not private. I meant... more suitable!" I tried to amend my error.

*I reckon... that they probably should be, but we won't include it in the story so that the readers can make up their own minds about it (basically we won't change the POV to a teacher. Ever.)*

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Permalink Reply by Blood Angel on March 10, 2009 at 5:44pm

POV Change (Keisha)

Not only was I shocked that the Smith kid had barged into the girls' room but I was also shocked that he wanted to talk to me. Only me. The vision I had just before seeing him was still fresh in my mind. I glanced over at Lila, then back at Smith.
"Where would more suitable be?" Getting my mind straight was proving to a bit hard at the moment.

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Permalink Reply by Aisling on March 10, 2009 at 5:48pm

"Well for one not in the girls' lavatories." He smiled humourously.

"Okay..." I replied. I took my book from Lila and thanked her. I told her I'd speak to her later and followed the Smith kid from the room.

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Permalink Reply by Blood Angel on March 10, 2009 at 6:08pm

As I followed Smith, I saw he became a little more relaxed now that he was out of the girls bathroom. I couldn't help but ask.
"Why do you need to talk to me so bad that you barged into the girls' room?" I watched him for his reaction.

Permalink Reply by quanisha overby on June 25, 2009 at 7:40pm

Is they really supernatural? I wondered.


Mr. Krebble is never like that! I said to myself . When the class was over i search every place I been that day . I still dont see my journal anywhere that journal has very important stuff in it fuck! I said to myself. Where can my damn book could be at.

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Permalink Reply by Aisling on March 10, 2009 at 6:25pm

POV Change (Dave):

"Well..." Okay. Now I felt silly. I didn't know for definate that she had suspected anything... "Erm... this is going to sound silly now but... why did you look so... so... shocked and... I suppose... horrified... at me before?"

*Sorry, it wouldn't let me reply to Blood Angel :/*

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Permalink Reply by Blood Angel on March 11, 2009 at 1:36am

POV Change (Keisha)

"You saw that?" I asked. I tried to think of an excuse that didn't involve mentioning that vision. "Um, well... You did jump out a two story window. Sorry. I... was surprised to see you walking around after that," I looked at him. "I looked horrified?"

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