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Permalink Reply by Mel on September 12, 2009 at 7:19pm

** I like the idea!! but i think Simon should be the one that throws the spade by mistake so then anthony will hate him even more and Simon would turn good and then when the last battle happens, anthony goes after Simon **

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Permalink Reply by annixandra lightwing on September 12, 2009 at 7:46pm

*hehehe i like that better than my idea wonder what ais and banana think of which should through the spear it could always be Kerry and she has just enough good in her that she freaks and has a mental melt down Simon could run to her to keep her safe in case any body try's to attack her while shes freaking out because she killed reena Anthony runs off because he sees that Simon is starting to good deeds and will either end up as an outsider or with the good guys and he and Lila run off seeing there defeated for this battle that would end the battle Simon would be worried about Kerry and him being surrounded by the rest of the group but Sammy could tell the group to chill that he was under her protection till she says otherwise and that so was Kerry no matter how much she disliked Kerry the others could back off and pick up the yard after the mini tornado and Reena's death knowing that if Sammy is protecting Kerry then if they mettle they will get hurt Sammy could talk more with her brother and Kerry as soon as Simon gets Kerry calmed down get them to understand that they were on the wrong side Simon could tell Kerry the truth that he loves her and all that and that could be how it is but i would like to hear what banana and ais think of that idea as well as what u think of this way to do the death sean*

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Permalink Reply by Mel on September 12, 2009 at 8:12pm

** Yeah I like it but my sister (banana babe) has some more to the idea dont feel like writing so she'll write it wen she signs on. **

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Permalink Reply by Aisling on September 12, 2009 at 8:37pm

*Omg... I have SUCH a good idea all written out in my head... but it'd be with Anthony killing Reena... ].[ And no one seems to want that!*

Permalink Reply by Mel on September 12, 2009 at 8:38pm

** Aisling just tell us the idea still and we'll see if we like it **

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Permalink Reply by Aisling on September 12, 2009 at 8:41pm

*No... it's a sort of write it out idea... like Anthony running off and being Reena as she dies and stuff... I can't really explain it without writing it... I could write it though and then we decide whether to keep it or not?*

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Permalink Reply by Mel on September 12, 2009 at 8:42pm

** yeah you should!! **

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Permalink Reply by Banana Babe XD on September 12, 2009 at 8:47pm

*i like the idea of anthony killing reena coz then he wud still hate simon more coz he could transform all his giult to anger and hate. btw for the part where Kery tells simon i thought that maybe after a bit they start getting close and they kiss and she finds out herself because with the kiss she realises it was rlly simon and stuff?*

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Permalink Reply by Aisling on September 12, 2009 at 8:48pm

*When Kerry tells Simon what? (And I will - I just have to finish doing the stuff on a few other internet tabs first so that it doesn't crash while I'm doing it - should only take a few seconds.*

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Permalink Reply by Banana Babe XD on September 12, 2009 at 8:53pm

*i meant when simon tells kerry that it was him. instead maybe they kiss and she realises. np tyt*

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Permalink Reply by Aisling on September 12, 2009 at 8:54pm

*Oh, ok.*

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Permalink Reply by Aisling on September 12, 2009 at 10:25pm

POV Change (Kerry):

I felt someone's eyes on me. I turned around, while Keisha was recovering from the punch that I had just given her. I saw Simon looking at me in an intense manner. He looked kind of sad. I smiled at him reassuringly. I didn't even think about doing it as I have been recentally.

Then Keisha tried kicking me so I had to look away.

POV Change (Dave):

Ok. So this Reena chick wasn't so bad at fighting... but she wasn't too awesome either. Although she had a MASSIVE attitude problem. I asked her her name and she spat at me! It took me ages to get her to answer! It was rather funny though.

"What's your name?" I had asked.

SPIT!

"Hey! I'm just getting sick of refering to you as "the girl" in my thoughts that's all!"

"You could refer to me as something else then!" She'd hissed at me.

"Like what?" I had asked, sceptically.

"Like bitch." She'd snarled.

"But I don't know that you are one." I had smiled at her, kind of having fun with our little conversation, said between punches and shit.

There had been a bit of a pause.

"Reena." She had said.

"Reena?" She had nodded breifly. So I had smiled again. "It's a very pretty name. Fits you beautifully." She had paused for a second then. I was in the middle of a kick, I stopped with her, putting my foot back down.

We had just stood there for a while, me smiling at her as she scruntinised me.

"You're not too bad." She had said after a moments hesitation. There was a slight pause again. "For a bastard!" She had yelled, aiming a kick for my chest.

She had clearly given up on hitting my man pieces. She knew that I could hurt her just as bad in the same unfair way... and she didn't like it.

I brought myself back to the here and now. I loved the way I had automatically kept on fighting as I was daydreaming. And I also hated it. It meant bad things.

"So. What's your name?" She asked me. I started.

"What?" I asked, the shock showing in my voice.

"Well, I'm sick of calling you bastard in my thoughts." She smiled at me coyly.

I smiled back. "Dave."

"Oh." She stopped mid-kick. "You're that little son-of-a-bitch then. I wasn't certain." Her voice sounded strained.

We stayed paused for a split second more before she started really going at me, more and more.

"I don't need YOU to call me pretty!" She yelled at me, angry as fuck, although I had no idea why.

"What are you talking about?" I yelled back, defending myself, but thus far only actually fighting back a little bit.

"You're the little son-of-a-bitch fucking cheater shitty cum-bag!" She yelled as many insults as she could at me.

"That I am." I said, calmly and sadly.

Then I felt the anger well up inside me.

Who was she to talk to me like that?

POV Change (Kyle):

I was starting to have fun working with Matt, especially now that we knew that powers don't seem to work on him, when the newer coven girl... Lila? Yeah, Lila. Came up to me. I knew that she had chosen me to fight over Matt and so I nodded to him and turned to her, creating fireballs in my hands, ready.

POV Change (Reena):

I was beating Dave, the little son-of-a-bitch when he started going mad at me. I mean what the fuck? What did HE have to be so angry about? I mean... he called me pretty... yeah right! He calls most of his friends pretty just to get in their pants! Whether they like it or not! As if Anthony wasn't making me feel like crap enough!

Dave was kicking me and punching me and biting me everywhere, I ended up having to give up on fighting back and just try to defend myself! I didn't know he was this strong or fast! Fucking hell!

POV Change (Lila):

I smiled at him, feeling wonderful to be able to fight again in such a long time. Being a non-growing vampire was amazing. I was the only one in the entire coven. All the others were the "grow to an adult then stay that age forever" type. I wasn't dealing with that shit. I was 1572 years old and still only looked about a hundrenth of that age.

Okay, going through school this year totally sucked... I'd never had to go through school before in my entire life! Not many people DID go when I was born... and I only had to go this year to find out about the quest people! I had managed to sneak my first glance at the new kid that was destined to be in my class in my very first month... how lucky! I'd never had to go again!

"So here we are. New kids to a school... having to fight. How delicous." I licked my lips. Grinning with venom again.

I unleashed my fangs and claws via the correct muscles before snarling and leaping onto him, pouncing via all my four limbs.

POV Change (Anthony):

I was glad that Lila had finally decided to fight Kyle, I was sick of being burnt! I know she's all powerful and shit... but she was really starting to get on my nerves!

I tried throwing all sorts of power shit at Matt but his body didn't seem to even be aware of any of it! How the fuck was I meant to beat him? I hardly learn Chi Quon Do in my spare time! *(Sorry I don't know the correct spelling)*

POV Change (Sammy):

I realised that Kerry had seen Simon. I smiled. Hopefully this will work to our advantage. And hopefully Simon will be happy again.

I turned to look around while I had the chance. Dave seemed to be kicking ass. Lila was squaring up to Kyle... or more Kyle to Lila... Keisha and Kerry were fighting... equally? I couldn't really tell... it didn't help that they were so far away either. And Anthony was... oh my God... he was struggling!

Matt kept hitting him and Anthony just kept on trying to hit him with some sort of magic power which just rebounded off of Matt! Aliah must have perform a spell on him to help him! Way to go Aliah! I didn't know you were that powerful! And then Anthony was also trying to block... but it didn't really seem to be working! He was COMPLETELY out of his comfort zone!

I just felt like laughing!

POV Change (Reena):

I was losing. I could see that. I was going to lose. No way could I let that happen! I am Reena. I do NOT lose! Even if I have to--

I screamed.

Dave had punched me in the breast again. The horribly stingingly painful and awful pain spread and ached and hurt throughout my entire body it seemed.

I looked at him, trying not to show my pain to him. He really could pack a punch. He was glaring at me with such hatred that I knew that he was planning on killing me.

I saw his hands strech outwards towards my throat. I needed help.

"ANT!" I screeched as loudly as I could.

I didn't know whether he would hear me. Or even whether he'd come to me if he could hear me and could possibly do it.

POV Change (kyle):

She pounced on me. I flared up my fire to create one massive fire ball. I looked into her eyes, smiling. Expecting to see her panic at the fact that she was literally falling staight into a trap, straight into fire.

Instead I saw her eyes suddenly flash a different colour. Without even thinking about it I snuffed the fire out completely.

I looked down, shocked. I have to bring it up again! How could I be so stupid?

POV Change (Anthony):

I heard Reena's call and reacted immediatly. I turned around to look at her and I saw what the problem was. Luckily Dave's back was facing away from me.

Matt punched me in the side of the head.

I created a wall of fire between us, which puzzled him. And quickly grabbed the object nearest to me: a fishing spear. I aimed for Dave's heart and threw with all of my vampiric strength.

POV Change (Sammy):

I kept Simon pinned down for ages. Just watching all the fighting, I felt like Aliah must feel, watching all of the terror.

As I watched what was happening with Dave and Reena, I began to slowly let go of Simon. Dave was going to kill her. He really was...

Simon turned round, surprised. He looked where I was looking. His mouth dropped open. Then he looked around.

"Anthony! NO!" He yelled.

My face turned to Anthony. He was chucking a spear at Dave!

How could I not have realised? If Dave dies it'll be all my fault...

POV Change (Matt):

I wasn't sure whether I could survive the fire. After a moments hesitation I decided to risk it. I stepped forwards and hesitated again before walking straight through it. I breathed a sigh of relief.

Then I realised my mistake.

Anthony was about to kill Dave. He had already thrown the spear.

It's all my fault.

POV Change (Aliah):

It seemed as if everyone was doing fine, no one needed my help. Then I noticed a change in Dave. He had become angry. Then he was going to kill...

I saw Matt hesitate at a wall of fire. I smiled at his hesitation. Surely he'd realised his other power now? Even if Sammy thought that it was me. Which was really rather sweet.

Then I saw Anthony. The smile fell off of my face.

DAVE! I screamed out in my head, even though I knew that he was too anrgy to hear me. Too intent on killing. I'd already tried...

It was too late. Dave was going to die and it was all my fault.

POV Change (Dave):

I was about to throttle her when I realsied what I was doing. I was killing her... I may be many things... but I REFUSE to be a killer... despite the evil creatures that I am... it's stuff like this that makes me think that...

I turned away from her, ashamed. Then I saw the spear.

I reacted instantly. I moved out of the way. Then I realised that it would hit Reena. Too late. I saw it plunge into the depths of her chest. I saw her fall.

I saw her die.

Chapter 17 (or is it 18?):

POV Change (Reena):

I was confused and slightly pleased that Dave had decided not to kill me after all. I had started to slightly like him before I'd found out who he was.

He turned away from me in shame. Then he moved.

What? Was he retreating? Giving up? Surrendering?

Then I saw the spear.

No. He was sacrificing.

Me for him.

POV Change (Aliah):

It all went quiet as the spear came closer to the pair. Everyone had noticed what was going on. And everyone wanted to find out who would die. And check that it was so.

It was the quietness that made it so sad. I couldn't help it.

Even though I saw Dave move out of the way when the spear struck I started to cry.

I saw that everyone was doing the same. Crying.

POV Change (Reena):

Everything seemed to go in slow motion.

The spear sliced me and I vaguely heard my scream. It plunged into the depth of what Anthony loved. My body. Nothing else. I knew that now. But it was too late.

I couldn't go back and not join the coven just for him. I couldn't not let him change me. I couldn't... I just couldn't... sort myself out any more.

I fell slowly to the ground, what must be blood, but probably also tears splashed my face.

I fell with a thump, the spear sticking itself into the ground. I was stuck to the ground. Like a horizontal scarecrow.

My tears flew more and more fluently down my face. So my life never did amount to anything. I never did save anyone or help anyone. I never did make Anthony love me. He just wanted the sex.

I was only angry at Dave because he reminded me of Anthony. I was so stupid to do so... so very, very stupid...

If I hadn't have done so then perhaps I wouldn't have died. Not like this.

I vaguely saw everyone moving around me, but only vaguely. My eyes were becomign heavier and everything around me was covered by a grey mist.

Why was it taking me so long to die? It must have missed my heart... just like Anthony did himself...

Just missed my heart and hit my breast instead...

Had Anthony meant to kill me? Did he think that my cry meant that I wanted to die? Why would he? Or perhaps he hadn't cared that I was going to die and did nothing. Perhaps this spear was thrown by whoever threw the bins.

I did not care.

My eyes were feeling heavier and heavier. My throat was feeling drier and drier. And yet still I have not died.

I saw Anthony walk past. Or was he running? My world was still slow.

Huh. I never got to tell Simon that I loved him.

Then, with that thought, I finally... FINALLY died.

POV Change (Simon):

I cried and cried at Reena's death. I liked her. She had been Anthony's girlfriend since long before we Changed.

And I had loved her too, a long time ago. We had almost become an item. But then Anthony stole her from me, just like he always does.

"Come, on Simon." Anthony ordered me telepathically, not even sounding sad.

"No Anthony. I'm staying." I expected him to argue but he didn't.

I vaguely heard him ask Kerry as well.

"Are you staying?" She asked me telepathically.

"Yes." I replied.

"Then so am I." She said in a very matter-of-fact voice.

I watched Anthony run past and away through the streets, Lila joining him.

So at least Lila was still going with him. At least the coven lives on.

POV Change (Matt):

"I'll find out where they're going." I said quietly. "They'll change their hide-out now that Simon and Kerry are staying. Someone look after my body."

Kyle came over to me and sat me down.

I realised that he meant that he would, just he wasn't ready to speak yet.

I spiritised.

POV Change (Aliah):

I came out of my hiding place, tears running down my face. It was all so sad. I needed Kyle to hold me... despite the awkwardness of our relationship so far.

The worst thing about it is that I could still sense her here.

POV Change (Kyle):

I felt Matt's body flop as I held it as he spiritised. I gently laid it down on the floor and sats till, staring ahead wiht the tears still flowing from my eyes. I looked up as Aliah came towards me. I stood up and closed the distance between us, holding her in my arms. I would have made shushing noises if I felt liek I could.

POV Change (Sammy):

After a while of everyone crying, we decided to go indoors and have a hot drink. Dave and Kyle carried Matt's body in. Matt would be able to find it because he'd know that'd we'd have gone inside. It was could outside, and dark.

They laid Matt's body on one of the sofas.

We sat down in the kitchen at the table. Aliah closed the blinds on Reena's dead body. We didn't feel like looking at it. And we also didn't feel like clearing it up somewhere and somehow.

We held mugs of hot chocolate between our hands, but no one drunk any.

Eventually Simon asked about Aliah and everything and so we had to fill him in.

The mugs were left full when we went to bed.

POV Change (Keisha):

Matt woke me up only a few hours after I'd finally managed to get to sleep for longer than an hour.

"Keisha! Keisha!" He shook me, rather violently. I realised he was shaking.

I thought he was cold before I realised that his body was inside and so it would be warm.

"What's wrong Matt?" I sat up, trying to stop feeling so sleepy.

"I saw a spirit." He said to me seriously.

"Oh, ok. Was it yourself by any chance?" I asked still sleepy.

"No. I usually see other spirits when I am in the form of one but... now I can still see her now... I think it's because I know her... I can't see any of the other spirits... and I know that there are some here... and I couldn't see her before I spiritised... it's creeping me out Keish..." He kept on glancing behind him, as if he was a paranoia freak.

"Ok, ok, I'm serious now..." I sat more upright than I was before. "You say you knew the spirit when it was alive... so who is it?"

"Who else Keish?"

"What?"

"Reena."


*For anyone who's a little lost here's the fighting thingys:

WAS:

Keisha & Simon

Kerry & Sammy

Reena & Dave

Anthony & Matt & Kyle


IS (before Reena's death):

Simon & Sammy

Kerry & Keisha

Reena & Dave

Anthony & Matt

Lila & Kyle*

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