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A Vampire's Romance Plot
Hi. I know I haven't posted anything in a long time I've just been so bored and depressed. I have this new plot and I want to see if anyone likes it. If you do I will add the 1st chapter.
It starts with a funeral of a young jock named John Jacobs, he is the sister of Laura Jacobs, the quiet goth girl. He was attacked during a camping trip and they found him 3 days later. Laura is very depressed, she stays in her home which is a normal suburban house. Meanwhile a tall, handsome, dark haired man moves into this mansion from the 16th century and no one usually moves in there. Laura then has romantic, lustful dreams of the man. She starts seeing more of him and meets him at her work, which is at a book shop and finds out his named is David Goth. One night Laura goes to a party held by her brother's best friend, Jake. She goes upstairs with him and they start kissing but Jake gets physical and Laura leaves. She starts walking home which is dangerous and gets chased by a wolf. She runs through the forest and gets to David's home. He rescues her and shoots the wolf and she finds out that it was a werewolf and that David is a vampire. She promises not to tell people. Throughout the story David and Laura start dating and there are murders that are wolf-like.
Anyone like?
It starts with a funeral of a young jock named John Jacobs, he is the sister of Laura Jacobs, the quiet goth girl. He was attacked during a camping trip and they found him 3 days later. Laura is very depressed, she stays in her home which is a normal suburban house. Meanwhile a tall, handsome, dark haired man moves into this mansion from the 16th century and no one usually moves in there. Laura then has romantic, lustful dreams of the man. She starts seeing more of him and meets him at her work, which is at a book shop and finds out his named is David Goth. One night Laura goes to a party held by her brother's best friend, Jake. She goes upstairs with him and they start kissing but Jake gets physical and Laura leaves. She starts walking home which is dangerous and gets chased by a wolf. She runs through the forest and gets to David's home. He rescues her and shoots the wolf and she finds out that it was a werewolf and that David is a vampire. She promises not to tell people. Throughout the story David and Laura start dating and there are murders that are wolf-like.
Anyone like?
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Permalink Reply by Michael T. Moon on -
Sorry to hear you have been depressed and bored. I hope you feel better. the plot sounds good write if it makes you feel good pour you depression in and write maybe a few poems first Hope you feel better
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Permalink Reply by Alice Green on -
I don't usually write poems but I will try. I'm only really bored because I am in such a small town. Thanks
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Permalink Reply by temptress of darkness on -
sounds pretty good...
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Permalink Reply by Alice Green on
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Thanks
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Permalink Reply by CHARLIE on -
I don't know. I mean it has been a long time I have given my view of anything due to the fact I am finishing off my college year.
I think the first thing that comes into my mind is that I am confused. I mean right now it sounds empty. Basic love story, like most horror novels. Maybe if you were to take the story seriously I think that there should be a mystery around her brother's death.
I don't know about the part of your protagonist (main character, who the story is about) is supposed to be in a relationship and yet is kissing someone else. Wouldn't you call that giving out the wrong signs. You say that she is a quiet girl, but honestly do you know any quite sad girl who would od that. If you are going to continue that lane, you have to think about how you can convey that so that it isn't a total surprise to the reader.
And the murders that you say that are wolf-like do you mean that the killers are werewolves or that the people that are being targeted specifically is werewolves.
I have to say that you need more horror, for you to effectively carry the concept of a murder mystery. The best idea is to read lots and lots of murder mystery. Strangely enough it does rub off and you learn a lot. The story that you write becomes more believable.
What you have to really think about is that you should try to intergrate some of your life experiences in to make it believable. You are depressed yourself? Well then use that depression to express through your protagonist.
I think that is all I can say on the moment on the subject.
Charlie Gold
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Permalink Reply by renegade heart on -
very interesting......
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Permalink Reply by AnnieBelle on -
I think that charlie that some really good ideas but I think that maybe david should be the bad guy and was really in an alliance with the werewolf and that they are doing the murders,including her brother's.But since you want it to be a romance let them still be together,her not noing and then have the werewolves tell her he'd lie,her freak out and then he begs for forgiveness and evantulally caves and they trually fall in love and if he is the type of vamp who can turn other's, he turns her and BAMM! happily ever after or the wolves could kill him for loving a human and break their truce.
Just some ideas good luck!!
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Permalink Reply by CHARLIE on
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I have to say that is funny. You make it romantic and tragic at the same time. Classic that.
I think what Bloody Tears wants from her story is a very sweet love story. A bit like Mills and Boon does, only with a supernatural content.
Though I think that yes some element of gore must be in it to be a great paranormal romance. Read some books that specify that they are paranormal romances.
Happy writing,
Charlie Gold
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Permalink Reply by Blood Wing on -
sounds sorta like the story u've already started which i love
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Permalink Reply by 4getfullXOXO on -
i love it BUT why does Laura have to fall in love with the vamp ??? in every freakin vamp story i read the weak human girl falls for the vampire and then forever love ! gah !!!!! its same thing !!!!!! either way i like :)
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Permalink Reply by Alice Green on
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ok nevermind I'll change it then
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