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This story is gonna be about a phsycic girl who has dreams about a vampire boy....(who is her dream guy) Just read it. Be a critic. and tell me about my mistakes. Tell me if you wanna read more...thanks!


Alexander looks over, his long hair glistening in the moonlight, keeping an eye out as his prey approaches. The smell of blood rushes over in a gust of wind. His senses grow stronger as he crouches down in the bushes. He realizes how easily he could snap the tree beneath his palm like a twig. He can hear the animals crawling and creeping around the forest, also stalking prey. Finally, coming into sight, a deer. Each step bringing it closer to its destiny. The spiked buck bows it's head taking a bit of grass, almost as if bowing to him. Alexander leaps from his hiding place and sinks his fangs into his victims flesh. The deer had hardly any time to react before he finishes it off and heads back to get some rest before school starts.


Allright! i havent edited this...i haven't even looked over it! just finished it, literally!

Elizabeth finds herself on a mysterious trail. The moon shines bright, but her vision is transfixed on the darkness that lurks beyond this path in the woods. “Elizabeth, help me.” She heard the struggling whispers float through her mind. The voice sounded familiar, but she couldn’t quite make it out. The sudden urge to run into the shadows hit her so hard she almost got knocked off her feet, but instead of falling she listened to her instincts, telling her to run. Why was she going in the darkness? She didn’t want to go! Where did it lead? And whose voice was that? How did she hear that voice? Maybe it was just her mind playing tri-. She saw a glow break through the trees and ran toward it faster. Something in her mind told her to turn around, she tried, but she couldn’t stop. She had to go, had to help.
She got to the end of the path to find a horrid scene. The boy, the one in all of her dreams was standing in the moonlight, blood spattered across his shirt and a stake drove through his heart. She ran to him just as he fell to his knees. She collided with him and held him in her arms. “What happened, how, wh-“
“Elizabeth, you need to go, you need to run far away or they’ll capture you, and they-“
“I can’t leave you. You know I can’t!” She could only manage a whisper, if she dared to get any louder she might burst into that shoulder shaking, heart hurting sobbing.
“Please, just do it for me. I need you to do just this for me. Just remember yo-“


Elizabeth sat up in bed, drenched in sweat. She looked over to her night stand, 5:30a.m. read her alarm clock. She tiptoed quietly to her door and opened it without a sound. Swiftly making her way down the stairs to the kitchen and grabbing a bottle of water, then crept back up to her room and closed her door. She opened up the balcony doors, fresh air flooded into her room and she took it all in. She looked out over her small town. She already saw the flicker of bus lights and kids being picked up. She looked up at the moon and the memory of her dream flashed through her mind. Her dream guy staked. The dark path. All the blood. She winced as the image of him as the life faded out of his eyes came into place. Her dreams were getting more detailed and she didn’t know why.
This last dream gave so much detail she now knows the color of his eyes, a soft pale blue, his skin was also pale almost transparent, and of course the black clothes he wore added to that.
Walking back into her room and shutting the doors, she sat down on her bed. It would be time to get ready for school. That dream she had was one of her weirdest, well, she’s seen much more gruesome and more bazaar, but this one was filled with so much emotion, she was filled with so much emotion that it felt real.
Elizabeth was so deep in thought that when her alarm clock rang out, signaling that it was time to get ready, she almost fell off the bed. Without another thought of the dream, she got ready.
Walking to school was something that Elizabeth actually enjoyed. Most teenagers would beg their parents for a car, but she loved the walk to school. The birds were singing, It was just the right temperature, and It was an excuse to get away from home and have a bit of freedom before school. Elizabeth also loved her school. Well, most of it. It was dark, gothic like. Everyone around town complained that it was a piece of junk and needed remodeling, but to her it looked like a palace. The gigantic black gates that if climbed over could possibly stab you with its pointy tips. The building was black and said to be used as church back in the day.
When she reached the front gate, Elizabeth just stood there and stared at the beauty, but then she heard a rumbling and looked back to find a slick black car coming down the street. She ducked out of the way, the car drove by her and into the parking lot. She opened the big doors and walked into the palace. She went unnoticed to her locker and on the third try, got the combination right. The hall was filled with laughter and talking, the usual for the first day back at school. Elizabeth looked around; she was so different from everyone else. She liked the color black and wore it a lot, but she wore different colors even though people treated her as if she was a piece of dirt in a completely white room.
She was just thinking this when the main doors opened and everything froze. Not the kind like everything pauses, but like people falling and dropping what their doing. An image flashed through her mind of the boy in her dreams standing in front of the main doors and like she predicted, Elizabeth turned to find the guy in her dreams standing right in front of her.




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